Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people’s life and then explain the consequence of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.
【解析】
一、审题谋篇
图画反映的是一个非常突出的社会现象：在生活中，人们过度依赖手机，甚至过马路时还不忘翻看手机。同时图画还具有讽刺意味，如文字所述：人们边看手机，边过马路，用拐杖来引路。结合写作指令和要求，我们可以将写作思路总结如下：第一段:围绕手机在日常生活中的使用日益增加，进行图画描述。在描述时需要将图片中人们在过马路时都在使用手机的现象进行说明。第二段:亮出观点并进行解释。?手机辐射影响健康。?过马路或开车时使用手机会造成危险。?过度使用手机造成人际关系疏离。?在工作和学习时分心。第三段：发表个人建议。?发挥手机应有作用即可，未必每时每刻都需要手机。?多和周围朋友同事见面交流，增进感情。?改变时刻使用手机的状态，提倡健康的生活方式，例如阅读和运动。
二、高分范文
The Overusing of Cell Phones
The thought-provoking drawing mirrors a common phenomenon of overusing mobile phones in contemporary society. As is subtly shown in the picture, while crossing the street, people are so much addicted to cell phones that they use walking sticks to see the road.
Nowadays, with the advancement of economy and technology, it is a plain truth that an increasing number of people overuse cell phones in daily routine. It is no doubt that indulging in mobile phones exerts a negative impact on wholesome mentality. First and foremost, overusing mobile phones is detrimental to physical health, which definitely impairs one’s eyesight. Moreover, suppose that a man is addicted to cell phones in whatever situation, it will be extremely disadvantageous for him to concentrate on his work, learning, or even daily life. Last but not least, it is no exaggeration to say overusing cell phones imposes restrictions on the relationship among people.
From my perspective, it is absolutely essential to take measures to change the present situation where people overuse cell phones. Consequently, there is no doubt that we should limit the excessive use of cell phones. Moreover, placing more emphasis on other entertainment such as reading and sports is also conducive to alleviating the issue. 三、范文点评
1. 本文结构完整，段落安排合理，字数符合标准。第一段能够清晰描述图画内容，突出写作主题；第二段观点清晰，论证合理，主体段写作丰满；第三段再次明确写作论点，总结和升华到位。
2. 本文文章内容切题。文字通顺，逻辑清晰，语言表达颇有可圈可点之处。 3. 本文语言表达准确，体现较强的写作水平。优秀表达如下： mirror: v.反映；
thought-provoking: 发人深省的； subtly: adv.巧妙地； wholesome: a.健全的；
be detrimental to: 不利于； definitely: adv.清楚地； impair: vt.损害；
extremely: adv.极其，非常；
impose restrictions on: 施加限制； it is absolutely essential: 完全有必要； alleviate the issue: 缓解问题；
it is no exaggeration to say: 毫不夸张地说； it is a plain truth that: 形式主语It的使用；
with the advancement of economy and technology: 介词短语,随着经济和科技的发展。
知识模块30：图表作文攻坚实战
图表作文也是四级考试中常见，而且被认为是一种较难的作文形式。图表作文就是把非文字信息(通常为各种图表表示的数字信息等)转换成文字信息的一种作文。它要求我们用文字来描述非文字性的图表或对图表显示的关系作解释说明。 一、图表作文命题趋势
图表作文一般在题目中给出作文的标题和一个或几个统计表格（table）、圆形图（pie chart）、曲线图（line graph）或条形图（column或者bar graph），在历年考过的四级真题中，以条形图（column或者bar graph）和圆形图（pie chart）的考查频率居高，因此我们在冲刺期对这两种图表类型也要给与充分的重视。 图表作文要求我们：
1)用文字描述图表，客观解释图表中所传递的信息，并找出某种规律或趋势; 2)就图表中所反映的某种趋势或问题分析其原因或后果。
从中我们可以看到，写好图表作文，关键在于能否读懂图表中所提供的信息，把握各信息间的联系，用准确流畅的语言把这一信息表达出来，并就这一信息发表自己的看法。
对于这类题型，通常要分三段来写，即图表作文的写作框架： 第一段：描述图表，总结趋势（图表主题概括+趋势具体描写）
第二段：联系现实，论证主题（原因分析总领句+原因一+原因二+原因三） 第三段：重申主题，提出建议（总结句+建议+前景预测） 二、图表写作方法详解
（一）第一段：描述图表，总结趋势 1. 描述图表必备词汇 （1）图表类型：
table 表格; chart 图表; diagram图表或图解，示意图; graph图表, 曲线图; column/ bar chart柱状图; pie graph饼图 （2）描述：
show; describe; illustrate; can be seen from; reveal; represent （3）数值内容：
figure; statistic; number; percentage; proportion （4）数据变化
上升：increase, rise, ascend, surge, go up, climb, mount, level up 下降: decrease, fall, drop, descend, decline, reduce ,lessen, level down
平稳: stable, steady, remain steady/stable，maintain/keep/be the same as/similar to，little/hardly any /no change 波动: fluctuate, fluctuation, rise and falls, up and down 占: occupy， take up， account for, gain
而: while, however, whereas , on the other hand, actually,in fact 相比: by contrast, on the contrary, likewise, compared with 最高点: the highest, the top, the summit, the peak, the most 最低点: bottom, less, least, rock bottom 平均: mean平均值, average
趋势: tendency, trend, inclination （5）变化程度
极大地remarkably /sharply /dramatically 缓慢地 steadily/slowly/slightly
表示范围：from…to…，between…and…
表示程度:almost adv. 几乎，差不多 nearly adv. 几乎，密切地 approximately adv.近似的，大约 just over 刚超过
exactly adv. 正确地，严密地, precisely adv. 正好，精确地；清晰地 2. 描述图表必备句型 （1）图表内容概括
①The table/graph reveals (shows/indicates/illustrates/ represents/points out) that … 该表/图表明…… ②As is shown (illustrated/indicated/revealed) in the pie chart … （2）变化趋势： 增长或下降：①The number of…increased/rose suddenly/rapidly/dramatically /considerably from 数据1 in 年份1 to 数据2 in 年份2.
②占据比例： _______ has the largest percentage/proportion of… ________ account(s) for / take(s) up 10%
③达到顶点： The situation/ figures reached/hit a peak/ high at 60% in… ④达到谷底： The situation/ figures bottomed out at 60% in… 3. 首段描图示例
关于柱状图的具体写作模式，我们以此篇为例逐一讲解。 （一）第一段第一层：如图所示+图表主题词
图表里涵盖的信息量很大，如何把握正确的信息点呢？首先，可以找到这个图表中的极值点（最大值，最小值），以及整体趋势。例如这个图，我们可以看到，1998年的数值是最少的，而2004年的数值是最大的。这两个点在图中具有极强的代表性，是必须得描述的，此外，整体趋势是稳定上升，我们也要描述，方便引出我们的图表主题。结合上述讲解的句子，我们可以写出第一段：
As is shown in the bar graph, the number of Master of Engineering matriculated experienced some changes
during the past several years. Specifically ，from 1998 to 2000, it increased gradually from roughly 2,500 to nearly 9, 000. However, it rose rapidly from 18,000 in 2001 to approximately 35, 000 in 2004.
（二）第二段的段落写作和我们之前学习的议论文的中间段是一样的。也同样采用总领句+原因分析的结构就可以了。 第二段第一层：原因分析总领句，有以下几个句子可以参考。 （1）Several factors may account for the trend.
（2）Some reasons must be lying behind this situation. （3）What exactly contributes to this phenomenon? Reasons can be listed as follows. 第二层：联系现实，论证主题
第二段的具体原因分析常见的分析维度原则： 1. 就业原则
（1） If they get higher degrees，they will become more competitive and their starting salaries can be higher.
（2） The degree of education is commonly viewed as value of the diploma-owner. Therefore, those with descent diploma are always cherished by employers 2. 知识原则
（1）Receiving further education will enable them to broaden their horizons and enrich their life.
（2）Years of education indeed endows them with the capacity in their professions, which improves their job performance and decreases their chance of unemployment. 3. 节省/ 浪费 原则
With the pace of modern life quickening, people barely have much time to waste in__________ . On the contrary, _____ can help busy people save a great deal of time. （三）第三段：重申主题，提出建议
第三段的内容主要是重申论点，提出建议，在此给大家一些表达，以供参考。 1. 总结
Hence from the trend of the past，we can predict that… By observing the trend of the past, we may forecast that… 2. 建议或预测
（1） 虚拟语气：It is high time that+一般过去时 （2） 倒装句式：Only through … can we…
（3） 名人名言：We should bear the following saying in mind that …. 3. 尾段示例
By observing the trend of the past, we may forecast that this tendency will continue. However, a master degree of engineering cannot ensure students of an ideal and well-paid job. We should bear the following saying in mind, ―Ability is the first step to success.‖
三、真题分析
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic ―the number of Master of Engineering matriculated‖. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the table and the outline given below: 知识模块30：图表作文攻坚实战
1. 根据上表，简要描述1998年---2004年全国工程硕士招生的人数及其变化； 2. 请说明发生这些变化的原因； 3. 得出结论。 【范文】
As is shown in the bar graph, the number of Master of Engineering matriculated experienced some changes during the past several years. Specifically，from 1998 to 2000, it increased gradually from roughly 2,500 to nearly 9,000. However, it rose rapidly from 18,000 in 2001 to approximately 35,000 in 2004.
Some reasons must be lying behind this situation. For one thing, if people get higher degrees，they will become more competitive and their starting salaries can be higher. For another, years of education indeed endow them with the capacity in their professions, which improves their job performance and decreases their chance of unemployment.
By observing the trend of the past, we may forecast that this tendency will continue. However, a master degree of engineering cannot ensure students of an ideal and well-paid job. We should bear the following saying in mind, ―Ability is the first step to success.‖
Directions: Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments
You should write about 120 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
【解析】
一、审题谋篇
该习题属于与大学生课余生活息息相关的一类主题----大学生兼职 ―college students' taking part-time jobs‖，字数要求在120词左右。这幅图表作文的横坐标是大学生的年级，纵坐标是参加兼职的学生的百分比，我们应该首先理清横纵坐标的关系。写作时，考生应将写作重点放在―随着年级的增长，参加兼职的学生百分比越来越多‖这个关系上。 二、高分范文
Emerging from the bar-chart above is a popular phenomenon that the proportion of the students taking part-time jobs has changed during the four years’ study. The proportion increases slightly from the first year to the third year, and then surges to 88.24% in the fourth year.
What exactly contributes to this phenomenon? Reasons can be listed as follows. First and foremost,in addition to getting pocket money, college students taking part-time jobs may enjoy a more exciting lifestyle as they can meet people from all walks of life and develop a sense of responsibility which cannot be learned in the classroom. In addition, to take a part-time job provides the students with a valuable opportunity to put what they have learned from books into practice.
From my point of view, it is difficult to judge whether taking part-time jobs is beneficial or harmful. It depends on how you deal with the relationship between working and learning. 三、范文点评
就文章结构而言，这篇高分范文遵循了―三段论‖的写作方法，该文章主题突出，结构清晰。第一段描述了柱状图的变化，抓住了大一学生的66.77%和大四学生的88.24%两个极值点，而且描述出了大学生从事兼职工作的比例是在不断上升的趋势。第二段主要进行了原因分析，主要从―金钱、知识、经验‖三个维度进行了阐述；第三段总结收尾，并进行了预测。就语言表达而言，本篇文章也可圈可点。 亮点表达：
1. in addition to 除了，除此之外 2. pocket money 零花钱 3. all walks of life 各行各业
4. develop a sense of responsibility 培养责任感
5. put what they have learned from books into practice 学以致用 亮点句：
1.Emerging from the bar-chart above is a popular phenomenon that …
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