雅思写作句子改错 (参考答案)(7)

错因：成分多余。本句的主语为what we should bear it in mind，而what充当了从句中的宾语，因此it是多余成分。

改正：What we should bear in mind is to spread wealth to the impoverished countryside． 大意：我们需要记住的是将财富带到贫穷的乡村地区?

185.There are some possible explanations as to why this problem has been happened． 错因：happen是不及物动词，不可以用被动。

改正：There are some possible explanations as to why this problem has happened． 大意：这个问题发生的原因有多种可能的解释。

186. Being like those general causes，such as heart disease and cancer，traffic accidents have become one of the biggest killers．

错因：成分多余。like作介词表示“如同，像……一样”，此处不需要加分词being。 改正：Like those general causes，such as heart disease and cancer，traffic accidents have become one of the biggest killers．

大意：就像那些普遍原因一样，如心脏病和癌症，交通事故已经成为人类最大的杀手之一。 187. I reject the notion that armed police have an essential deter effect on potential offenders． 错因：deter是动词，不能修饰名词，要改成形容词deterrent。

改正：I reject the notion that armed police have an essential deterrent effect on potential offenders 大意：我不接受警察配枪对潜在罪犯有震慑作用的看法。

188. Many regions have imposed strict rules, however，this does not automatically mean that road offences have been curbed．

错因：however表示“但是”的时候，是副词而不是连词。

改正：Many regions have imposed strict rules；however，this does not automatically mean that road offences have been curbed．

大意：很多地区已经实施严格的规定，然而，这并不意味着道路违规已得到控制。 189． Criminal prevention can be done in any context or location, where it is in a residence, workplace，school，neighbourhood or community．

错因：criminal是形容词，表示“犯罪的”，其名词意义表示“罪犯”，根据句意，在这里应该是强调犯罪这种事情的预防，因此应该用表示“犯罪”的名词crime。

改正：Crime prevention can be done in any context or location, where it is in a residence, workplace，school，neighbourhood or community．

大意：犯罪的预防可以在任何情景或者地点实现，无论是居住地、工作地、学校、街区或者社区。

190．Lack of a classification in the prison is exposes first-time and non-violent offenders to repeat and violent offenders．

错因：此句出现两个谓语动词is和exposes，根据句意，保留expose的一般现在时态即可。 改正：Lack of a classification in the prison exposes first-time and non-violent offenders to repeat and violent offenders．

大意：在监狱里缺乏罪犯分类系统会让初犯和非暴力犯罪者接触惯犯和暴力犯罪者。

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191. Speed is the single biggest cause of road traffic collisions． 错因：speed表示“速度”，根据句意应该用speeding\超速驾驶”。 改正：Speeding is the single biggest cause ofroad traffic collisions． 大意：超速行驶是路面碰撞事故发生的最大原因。

192. Checking into a nursing home is likes dropping out of society, and can lead to feelings of isolation．

错因：like在这里是介词，没有数的变化。

改正：Checking into a nursing home is like dropping out of society, and can lead to feelings of isolation．

大意：住到老人院就如同和社会脱节一样，会导致孤独感的产生。

193. The rapid extension of the lifespan，result from improved health and licing conditions, is a feature of all developed countries in the 21st century.

错因：句子出现两个谓语动词，result from是动词短语，应该将其变作分词。

改正：The rapid extension of the lifespan，resulting from improved health and licing conditions, is a feature of all developed countries in the 21st century.

大意：健康状况和生活条件的改善使寿命迅速延长，这是二十一世纪所有发达国家的一个特征。

194. The cost of health care in retirement is large, because people tend to be illness more frequently in later life.

错因：illness是名词，表示“疾病”，应该改成其形容词形式ill，“生病的”。

改正：The cost of health care in retirement is large，because people tend to be ill more frequently in later life．

大意：退休的健康医疗费用是很大的，因为人在晚年往往更加频繁地生病。

195．There is a general stereotype that a worker becomes less productive as one gets older. 错因：指代不清。one表示任何一个人，不能指代a worker。

改正：There is a general stereotype that a worker becomes less productive as he or she gets older. 大意：一个人变老的时候，他或她的工作能力会下降，这是一个普遍的成见。

196．Retirement might coincide with many important life changes, such as have less frequent contact with their previous social context.

错因：such as后一般加名词、动名词或者介宾短语等。

改正：Retirement might coincide with many important 1ife changes，such as having less frequent contact with their previous social context．

大意：退休或许会和人生的很多重要变化一起发生，比如和之前社会圈子的接触减少等。 197．The age ofretirement should be raised progressively because trends in life expectancy. 错因：because作连词时后跟完整句子，如果跟短语则应该用because of.

改正：The age ofretirement should be raised progressively because of trends in life expectancy. 大意：由于人均寿命的变化，退休的年龄一定会逐步提升。

198．Some senior people might raise the question as to why should they be forced out of

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employment because of age.

错因：why在这里引导一个从句，应该用陈述句语序。

改正：Some senior people might raise the question as to why they should be forced out of employment because of age．

大意：年长的人或许会提出质疑----为什么他们一定要因为年龄而被迫离职。

199. The traditional prejudice is that the old will take time off whereas the young will not．The oppose is found to be the case.

错因：oppose是动词，不能作主语，应该改成名词opposite。

改正：The traditional prejudice is that the o1d will take time off whereas the young will not．The opposite is found to be the case．

大意：传统的偏见认为年纪大的员工会请假，而年轻的员工则不会。但事实刚好相反。 200. Improved medical technology and health awareness are allowing us live longer. 错因：惯用法。allow的用法是allow sb. to do。

改正：Improved medical technology and health awareness are allowing us to live longer. 大意：先进的医疗技术和健康意识让我们的寿命更长。

201．It has been become harder to maintain 1iving standards far the dependent population, because the workforce is shrinking．

错因：成分多余。been和become都是动词，两者取一。

改正：It has become harder to maintain living standards for the dependent population，because the workforce is shrinking．

大意：由于劳动人口在缩小，要维持没有劳动能力的人的生活水准就变得更加困难。 202．There is a general stereotype that women are less intelligent and capable than men and need not to be treated equally．

错因：need使用错误。need作情态动词的时候否定形式应该是need not，而作实义动词的时候否定形式应该是do not need.

改正：There is a general stereotype that women are less intelligent and capable than men and need not be treated equally．

大意：一般的偏见认为女性不如男性聪明能干，不需要被平等对待。 203．The biggest obstacle to recruiting females in the army could social attitudes． 错因：谓语不完整。缺少be动词。

改正：The biggest obstacle to recruiting females in the army could be social attitudes． 大意：在军队中雇用女性的最大障碍可能是社会态度的问题。

204．Women are now able to take control of their lives and take a much active part in the world． 错因：much一般不能直接修饰形容词，而是修饰形容词的比较级。

改正：Women are now able to take control oftheir lives and take a much more active part in the world．

大意：女人现在可以掌握自己的人生，在世界上扮演更为活跃的角色。

205．Traditionally，the police force is typically a male-dominating domain and women are

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considered a minority group.

错因：分词错误。dominate应该用过去分词的形式，与domain之间是被动关系。 改正：Traditionally,the police force is typically a male—dominated domain and women are considered a minority group．

大意：从传统上讲，警察队伍是男性主导的领域，而女性被认为是少数群体。

206．It is certainly true that the position of women in society has undergone a remarkable change in past century．

错因：past之前应加定冠词the。

改正：It is certainly true that the position of women in society has undergone a remarkable change in the past century．

大意：妇女的社会地位在过去一个世纪里确实经历了显著的改变。

207·Athletes are now able to play to an older age, recover more quickly from injuries and train more effectively than previously generations of athletes, because of technological development． 错因：词性错误。previously不能修饰名词generations，应用其形容词形式。

改正：Athletes are now able to play to an older age，recover more quickly from injuries and train more effectively than previous generations of athletes，because of technological development． 大意：由于技术的发展，相比前几代的运动员，现在的运动员运动生涯更长，从伤病中恢复更快，而且训练也更为有效。

208. It can be argued that the current scale and status of the Olympic Games is owing entirely to the developments of communication technology．

错因：owe…to…表示“将……归功于”，在此句中，应用其被动语态。

改正：It can be argued that the current scale and status of the Olympic Games is owed entirely to the developments of communication technology．

大意：可以提出的一点是，奥林匹克运动会目前的规模和地位完全归功于通信科技的发展。 209. Although many overseas students will return their home countries sooner or later，the experience of being away from home can be life-changing． 错因：return是不及物动词，后面要加介词才能跟宾语。

改正：Although many overseas students will return to their home countries sooner or later, the experience of being away from home can be life-changing．

大意：很多海外学生迟早都要回到祖国，但离家在外的经历是可能影响一辈子的。 210．Many educators nowadays stress permitting pupils to pursue independently whatever interests them.

错因：当whatever充当从句主语的时候，谓语动词常用单数。

改正：Many educators nowadays stress permitting pupils to pursue independently whatever interest them.

大意：很多教育者现在都强调允许小学生独立追求任何他们所感兴趣的东西。

211. According to some educators，the goal of teaching is helping students learn what they need to know to live a successful life．

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错因：当主语是goal，objective，purpose和mission等这些词语的时候，表语应该用不定式，对主语起补充说明的作用；不定式作表语一般表示目的、原因等，特别是表示将来的动作。 改正：According to some educators，the goal of teaching is to help students learn what they need to know to live a successful life．

大意：根据一些教育者的看法，教育的目标是帮助学生学习获得成功人生所需要知道的东西。

212．The debate which is whether or not human nature is the key factor in criminal production has attracted public attention.

错因：根据句子结构，本句不能为定语从句。可以将本句改为debate+介词over／about+宾语从句。

改正：The debate over／about whether or not human nature is the key factor in criminal production has attracted public attention．

大意：关于人的本性是否是导致犯罪的主要因素的争论引起人们的广泛关注。

213．A university is now multi-ethnical and multi-cultural，which students from all over the world study together．

错因：后面从句中关系词应作状语，所以此处应改为关系副词where。

改正：A university is now multi-ethnical and multi—cultural，where students from all over the world study together．

大意：当今，大学是一个多元文化、多种族的场所，在那儿学习的学生来自世界各地。 214．There can be little doubt that teamwork is well suited to encourage effort and academic achievement．

错因：to在这里是介词，需要加动名词，而不是动词原形。

改正：There can be little doubt that teamwork is well suited to encouraging effort and academic achievement．

大意：毫无疑问，团队合作非常适合鼓励大家付出努力，并促进学术成就。

215．Although the computer cannot replace the teacher，but it can be used every now and then to ease teachers?workload．

错因：although和but不能连用。

改正：Although the computer cannot replace the teacher，it can be used every now and then to ease teachers?workload．

大意：虽然电脑不能完全代替老师，但是它可以时而被用来减轻老师的工作量。

216．An excellent student should be measured not only by the ability to read and write but also the ability to cope with different problems in real life．

错因：使用not only…but also…的时候，要注意前后结构对应。

改正：An excellent student should be measured not only by the ability to read and write but also by the ability to cope with different problems in real life．

大意：衡量一个优秀的学生不应仅以其读写能力为依据，也应该考量其在现实生活中处理各种问题的能力。

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